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  • Let's try to write haiku?

    A haiku (俳句 high-koo) is short three-line poem that uses sensory language to capture a feeling or image. Haiku poetry was originally developed by Japanese poets. They are often inspired by nature, a moment of beauty, or poignant experience. To write a haiku, start by brainstorming ideas for the poem. Then, write the poem with strong details and detailed imagery. Make sure you polish the haiku and listen to how it sounds out loud so it is at its best.

  • #2
    I wrote some Haiku some time ago...
    however, in the end they did not fit my idea of poetry.
    I could not write one without thinking of making a word doing a cryptic crossword.
    for me (personally) what is precious about poetry is expressing oneself.
    not of rhyme (the first enemy)
    nor of can scan or not or scan backwards
    and yet it must be recognizable as a poem....

    I cannot explain... I guess,

    17 sylables 3 lines, 5,5, is a crossword puzzle....some are poetic but i cannot escape the idea that people must make a competition to say something/anything and obey these constraints...
    is it possible to obey..and yet speak freely ?
    maybe I just cannot imagine doing haiku...
    good luck to those who wish to play...


    • #3
      the train of thinking
      crosses my mind and
      there’s a strike at the station

      Ed Coruja


      • #4
        I think that 17 syllabes Haiku fits Japan and Japanese language, and to make it easy for all non-Japanese speakers we should modify it a bit. How? I suggest to let it be a three lies poems without talking about the issue of syllabes, and make with or without imagery.


        • #5
          here is a topical one

          The refugee
          Fallen into space
          Caught by barb'd red tape
          Why you grant me no solace ?

          Ed Coruja


          • #6
            I don't know what you will think of this, but each verse (stanza for the snobs) is a haiku..although I have taken a bit of poetic license.
            each one is kind of 17 syllables but if you are counting stuff like that, you have missed the point.

            flies in my eyes, so
            sorry, its not a
            wonderful image for you

            your kids, when they flick
            that video switch
            and the spotlight hits, yeah man,

            life’s a bitch, innit
            when the tv is
            the snitch, and it shows its not

            so complicated
            its easy its not
            rocket science its just more

            economics like
            we have to fear our
            brother, or we will be in a

   stuck with some
            bloodsucker fixing
            teeth on mother’s tits, can you

            realize, can you
            understand that now
            your brothers and sisters are

            dying they are not
            guilty of a crime
            just born, the wrong place and the wrong

            time and now they're
            dying one by one
            one after another one

            and then another
            one and once again
            another one, they just slip

            beneath the water
            disappear except
            if the tv camera

            focusses on their
            lives and then, so what
            who cares some Syrian or

            some kid or his mom
            or dad drown in the
            waves, pulled down beneath the tide

            its the story that
            uncle Oz wants us
            to buy into, a cool plan

            just let the mother
            fùckers drown the whole
            family drowned or upped and died

            Its Tony Abbot’s
            final solution
            just let them die but
            call it what it is ...genocide

            Ed Coruja
            Last edited by Coruja-the-Owl; 10-14-2017, 10:27 AM.


            • #7
              refugees great poem, once they were known here in OZ as Asylum Seekers now Australia calls them Illegal Entrants Queue Jumpers Terrorists its all about Border protection spin spin spin. Tony Abbott also recons global warming is a good thing less people die due to heat,wouldn't want to buy a house in the Maldives with that concept of thought.


              • #8
                yup, I am sorry that the poem had such an anti-australian aspect when it was finished, many many countries have obnoxious, criminal policies towards refugees (including the uk), unfortunately Australia is being portrayed as a suitable model system for others to copy...It seems crazy, the majority of the population of australia is made up of the children/descendants of economic or political refugees...such a short memory...

                Anyway I am glad you liked it and that it didn't annoy you.